please tell me what u think :)

[OnlyMe]

hey guys! Laurs cousin laura asked me to write a poem for laurs, its really hard to write a poem when you are asked to, so this is all i could come up with, please give loadsa critisism cus the poem has 2 b perfect by monday!
love u guys, take care xxxxxxxxxxx

Laurs has gone away now
At last she is free from pain
she begged me not to cry for her
I pray you'll do the same

She has gone to be an angel
way up in the sky
This just proves my theory
That the best are made to die

It feels like she's still here
and it hurts me everyday
when you love someone so much
pain's the price you have to pay

She is my strength and inspiration
She gave me so much hope
On those never ending rainy days
She showed me how to cope

I wish she didn't have to go
But I know it's for the best
I know she is safe now
And in peace I pray you rest

I believe that she is happy
where ever she may be
I hope that she is smiling
cus she means the world to me

[PurplySparkleyJoey]

Gem, thats is truly insprational. I know its been really hard on you the last week loosing a good friend, but like you say she has been taken to be an angel.
I hope everything goes ok on Monday and that every one remembers her before her illness took hold. She will be looking down on you smiling

Jo xx

[Funky-Fran]

I've said it before...... that poem is fantastic
I think Laurs would be chuffed with such a great friend and poem

xxx

[unicorn]

The poem is very moving u should not change a thing with it just read it as it is unicorn xxxxxx

[Funky-Fran]

see gem i told you

[PurplySparkleyJoey]

Are you going to be reading it out your self on MOnday hun??

Jo xx

[OnlyMe]

Thankyou so much laydeeez! 8-)I wont be reading it myself, Laura will be reading it. I hope to make it on monday, but it's up to my mum if she can get the day off work. So fingers crossed!

I wanna thankyou guys for being there for me this last week 2! Thanx for putting up with my poems. You helped keep me strong so I could be strong for Laura. Laura is coping really well now, she got her old job back and her and her boyfriend are doing well together!! ;D
Big kisses ang huuuuuuugs
xxxxxxxxxx

[Taz]

now that brought i lump in my throat you really are such a beautiful poet and i love ya!!
love and great big hugs and all that stuff
Taz xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx